Lead: Cancer concerns amongst Connecticut Police have led to the ban of hand-held radar guns in Meriden, Conn.
2nd Paragraph: Studies are currently researching the possibility of radiation from the devices causing cancer, leading to the precautionary ban.
The Nut: "The feeling here is to err on the side of caution until more is known about the issue," said a spokesman for the state police. "The whole situation is under review."
Kicker: In the meantime, 70 radar guns are being withdrawn from service and being replaced by car mounted transmitters.
1 comment:
I think that this definately gets a response from the reader, but needs more of a factual backup. There's no sense of who delivered the speech, or what led up to the ban. Personally, I wasn't sure whether I should have mentioned that three officers were searching workers comp because of cancer concerns from working with the guns. I think that you made the right choice in terms of cutting that out; gets the info across without drawing the storyline too thin.
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